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PostSubject: Ventus Prince   Sat Mar 31, 2012 5:00 pm

Ventus Prince~ king


[[Before you read this; This is technically Nasako's distant cousin. There clans branched off, Ventus is in one branch, Nasako is in the other. [Two sites; Two Branches. xD] And therefore they share a lot of qualities but don't know each other. His clan history is kind of on Nasako's history and i didn't feel like copying on here. xD]]

~Age: 16
~Gender: Male
~Village Hidden in the Clouds ; Land of Lightning
~Rank: Chuunin
~Clan: Prince
~Kekkei Genkai: Heavenly Fists
~Chakra Affinity: Wind
~Trainable Arts: Advanced Genjutsu, Medical Ninjutsu, Advanced Taijutsu


~Description:
Ventus has flowing sandy brown hair. He usually spikes it up in the front and lets it flow in the breeze. It is loose and straight, naturally though. He has light brown eyes that usually attract attention because of the unique light color. Ventus is very personable and does like attention as most humans do, but tries not to attract too much of it. He is an outgoing, fun person, and is easy to get to know and fun to be around. The villagers enjoy his presence and are, for the most part, like him. One of his biggest downfalls though, is that he is a perfectionist. At first glance, people may think of him as a push-over and possibly not a good ninja. Although they are mostly wrong or change their opinion after they stay around him for a while.

He wears an extremely light shade of blue short-sleeve shirt with light silver, almost white shorts. He has a muscled, full body, and at almost 6’ he is considered taller for his age. His headband is always worn around his arm, almost always. The only time it’s actually around his forehead is when he is very serious. This isn't often, but it does come along every once and a while.

He prides himself in keeping a somewhat healthy exercise and diet, but on occasion, will pig out. His height can be rounded to 6'0", or about 5'11" and he weighs 155 lbs.

Lastly, Ventus prefers wearing item pouches on his left thigh, but also carries some on his right. There’s 1 shuriken pouch on his left and right, along with a kunai pouch on each. He carries other accessories on his left though, such as explosive tags. He also carries 20 special leaves given to him by his clan. They work the same as explosive tags but can be disguised as normal-looking leaves. He can use any Leaf for this jutsu, but since he may be fighting in a forest or area where there are no leaves, he carries those.

Lastly, he has a magnificently carved bow that is always slung over his shoulder. He also has a sheath of special arrows, which consists of explosive arrows and normal arrows.



~History:
Since his birth, Ventus was a lonely child. He was told over and over by numerous people that he had such a huge family, but he would never see anyone. Once the village had settled in a little bit, a lot of construction had been going on. His parents were constantly working full-time to help build the village or going on missions to look for supplies and maybe fend off a rouge or two. Ventus had no brothers or sisters, and all of his cousins seemed to live further away. A few aunts and uncles stayed around the place where his Clan lived among the village. Once he got to an appropriate age, his parents trained him every spare second they got. At some times, they would stay up till after dark and be sparring and teaching new techniques. His parents focused extra time on Wind Release techniques and some clan Genjutsu. But it was harder for them now because his clan was starting to split up.

Soon the Cloud Village organized their ninja and assigned ranks, Ventus was told he was cleared to be a Genin and therefore was assigned a sensei and two squad members. Most of the good missions passed by them because for the majority of the times, his squad would just be working on delivering and protecting heavy amounts of supplies for construction. [[MAY CHANGE]]

When they finally got ahold of a good mission, they were ecstatic, and would go to any lengths to complete it. Ventus had almost perfected some of the Wind Nature attacks he learned and was all ready for a battle. During the mission, a group of rouges attacked the group, and took them off the course of their mission. When they finally got back on course, they ended up being ambushed again by another village’s ninja. They were attempting to steal the important documents Ventus’ squad had because it could potentially ruin their small village.

A fierce battle raged on for hours, although it felt like days. Towards the climax, Ventus took one for the team, and got stabbed in the arm. Chakra exhaustion and the wound he receive nearly finished him off, and he felt he became a nuisance to his team. His sensei was horribly injured as well because he was fighting the majority of the battle. The opposing team’s trump card nearly wiped out the entire group, but thanks to Ventus’ sensei’s sealing technique which stopped the other squad and their jutsu. The cost being that he had to sacrifice his own life. Barely escaping with his life, Ventus fled with only one team member. The only reason Ventus made it out, was because he was already far away from the battlefield, prepping for his final move.

Both his sensei and his one of his teammates ended up dying. Ventus wasn't ever the same, and he poured his faith into his last remaining teammate, who was in critical condition. Although he survived, he was told by doctors that he couldn't be a ninja ever again, and would be bound to a wheelchair. It impacted Ventus in more ways than one, because he now knew that he wouldn't get another team, and that he had to live knowing that he failed in saving his teammates.

Ventus tried to take the experience and use it to make him stronger. He trained a lot afterwards, and did whatever he could to aid the village. One of the major changes that Ventus made in his life was training to become a Medical Ninja. Once he saw how he couldn't do anything after his injury in battle, he realized that he wanted to be able to do more and help the people in the village more; especially on missions .Not only had his clan finally split, but he lost almost all of the training he received in the special Leaf Release. After completing the tests and trials of becoming a Chuunin, and was actually named a Chuunin, he couldn't have been happier. His parents were, of course, late to the ceremony, but the look of pride on their face was nonexchangeable.

As a Chuunin, he watched over many different things in the Village. He learned ways to curb currents away from their little clan settlement in the Village Hidden int he Clouds. He researched different things about electrical currents and various ways to keep himself safe in a village crammed with Lightning. He also advanced his Medical Ninjutsu and learned some helpful techniques to use in battle or just to heal comrads. He was actually praised to be one of the best in the village, since there weren't too many there. He also managed to further develop his Kekkei Genkai and learn more Wind Release techniques from a select few Clan members still inside the village. His strength improved, as well as his speed and Taijutsu. He traveled around surrounding places for a while, and went in search for a few clan members. He met many people and learned many things, such as a lot of new tips and tricks for medicine and extra battle training. More missions started to get completed, and his life seemed good, as a Chuunin.

Tragedy struck Ventus again at Age 13. His father had fallen into a deep, deep depression. The only thing he wpuld do all day is sit around, ignore missions and eat. He never talked much to anyone and nobody knew why. One day, very mysteriously, he packed up and left without saying a word and the only person who seemed to know the exact situation was Ventus' mother. She was completely torn between her village and her lover. Ventus couldn't help her to decide because he was as confused as ever, but he managed to tell her that he would support her with whatever she chose to do. In the end, that was his mother's deciding factor, in her decision to leave. Ventus' support was all she needed to go through and follow her husband.

This may seem like a sad event, but it actually gave Ventus a lot of pride. The fact that his mother's decision needed his support and only his meant the world to him. Ventus took a gained sense of freedom from the event and used it to further his abilities as a ninja.


RP SAMPLE: [[I wasn't sure which kind of sample you wanted, so a normal scene and a battle scene.]]
Normal Scene;
Ventus was laying in bed, smooth dawn light filtering through the shades on his window. It was exactly 4 minutes past the time he should be up and about, he had counted. The mattress of his bed told him otherwise. Instead of moving, Ventus turned and looked out the window of his beautiful house. It wasn't nearly big in size but it suited him and his needs plus more. There was a breathtaking view of the mountains and there was also a small lake located near his backyard. His house was pretty secluded, in an area of the Leaf that not many people knew about. It was nice for him though because he often saw all kinds of birds that would fly through. [The place he lives is a "hot-spot" for birds.]

Laying there quietly, not a stir, Ventus just stared out his window. His thoughts drifting from his parents to his friends to his 'big' family. A figure caught the corner of his right eye as it leapt up onto the bed. Without reacting, Ventus put out his hand and pet his small kitten, Patches. He had gotten the small tortieshell she-cat a few months back purely out of loneliness. He loved having her around because she kept him company. With a meow, she jumped and dashed toward the window, wishing to be out there, wildly chasing those birds. Ventus put on a smile and crawled out of bed in only a t-shirt and loose blue boxers. He groaned and went towards the kitchen, pulling out a light box of cereal. He grabbed the last bit of milk, poured it and then threw away the empty carton.
After eating it quickly, Ventus re-filled Patches' food and water, then turned on the hot water for a shower.

A half hour later, Ventus was changed and fresh. He exercised for a little then walked out to the village for a busy day...

Battle Scene;
Ventus was perched up in a tree, deep inside the forest that was on the outskirts of the Cloud Village. There was a group of rouges that were trying to break into the village from a 'unique' angle, as Ventus overheard them saying. There was only three of them and the looked only a few years older than he, he observed and he looked down on his enemy. Silently, he pulled out a kunai and watched as they tried to sneak closer to the village wall. They were about 3 meters from his tree, and Ventus saw an opportunity to stop them, so he took it by throwing the kunai at the ground in front of them, momentarily stopping their progress.

As soon as it left his hand he was up and into another tree where he threw another at a tree trunk next to where they were now standing. In the clearing that they were in, they looked around and tried to locate their attacker. Ventus smirked and grabbed about 10 or 15 leaves off of the tree he was on and started weaving signs for a jutsu. [He carries them for this jutsu; Explained below] Within seconds, he was off again, circling the confused ninja and at the same time, dropping the leaves. About 6 of them were now slowly dropping and Ventus stopped moving but kept the ninja in sight. They hadn't noticed the special leaves because they blended in with other leaves that had fallen before. (Justu; Leaf Release: Explosive Leaves )

Finally, Ventus attached the rest of his leaves to kunai and tossed them strategically around the rouges. After they all landed, the rouges began to back out of the clearing but they were too late, Ventus leaped down from his tree, away from the clearing but close enough to be seen. The ninja angrily tried to charge but Ventus already made a single hand sign and yelled, "Release". At last, the special leaves he had thrown before exploded in a huge plume of fire and smoke. Ventus turned and went back to his village, unsure of the state of the rouges but sure that they wouldn't be coming back anytime soon.


[[Bad-ish examples but i'm sick and i'm pretty sure you've seen me RP better before. xD I just quickly wanted to end the battle and show that he was clever, sorry if it seemed GM-like...]]

Techniques;
~Wind Cutter
~Wind Release: Tornado Palms
~Wind Release: Wind Hounds
~Wind Release: Pressure Damage (Canon)
~Wind Release: Flower Scattering Dance (Canon)
~Wind Release: Gale Palm (Canon)
~Chakra Enhanced Strength
~Heavenly Foot of Pain (Canon)
~Mystical Palm Technique (Canon)
~Soulbane (Canon)
~Ephemeral (Canon)
~Heavenly Ninjutsu; Guardian Fists
~Secret Prince Clan Genjutsu; Royal Jay Flock

Non-Canon Technique Templates;

To be clear with the Ephemeral, I just wanted the part where you use the closest friend as psychological torture. xD

Name: Wind Cutter
Type: Wind Release Ninjutsu/Weaponry Combination
Rank: D
Hand Seals:
Description: This is a technique that basically just sends blades of wind out to slice up anything in it's path. It stretches out to about 5-6 feet and only reaches up about 5 ft. off the ground. Lastly it lasts for only a few minutes, maybe 6 or 7 continuous movement in one direction. Enough to make it across a small field easily and still be sightly effective.
*Extra: Ventus specifically uses this technique with his explosive leaves to create a sharper leaf and the explosions can also create fire among the wind.

Name: Wind Release: Guardians of the Wind
Type: Wind Release Ninjutsu
Rank: C
Hand Seals: Dragon-Tiger-Ox-Ram
Description: This jutsu allows the user to create three swiftly moving tiger-like animals made of wind to attack an enemy during a battle. They can only travel about half a mile before dissipating and they can attack for 10 consecutive minutes unless destroyed by an enemy or released by the user.
*Extra: They are about 3'6" and can travel at about 55 mph. at full speed.

Name: Wind Release: Tornado Palms
Type: Wind Release Ninjutsu
Rank: A
Hand Seals: Horse-Dragon-Dog-Serpent-Boar-Tiger
Description: This is a jutsu that is difficult to handle and Ventus doesn't usually use it unless it is an emergency. It creates to small tornados in the palms of his hands by summoning up a lot of wind chakra and swirling it in the palms of the users hands. After a little time it can leave the users hands and grow considerably in size, partially from the in general force of wind in the air and in part from the chakra the user puts into it.
*Extra: Overall, the jutsu is harder to control and that is why Ventus chooses not to use it a lot. It can also tend to use a lot of chakra and could leave the user with little to no chakra if used too late in a battle. The technique also doesn't turn directly to once size, since they are both large in size, they usually only go in one direction and can slightly shift in direction. They can travel about 10-15 miles before disintegrating and are around 20 feet tall, the height of a full-grown tree and are about 5-5 ft. wide depending on how far the wind reaches past the dimensions.


Clan Template: Princep Clan:
~Name: Princep Clan

~Village: The more important members of the Prince Clan [Main Branch/Ventus clan] live mostly in the Village Hidden in the Clouds, Ventus' family in general lives around the Land of Lightning. The Jay Clan [Secondary Branch/Nasako's clan] resides in a lot of different areas in the world.

~Status: Although everyone is allowed and I doubt anyone will actually deny anyone, just ask my permission.

~Description: The Prince Clan is generally a friendly group of people. They prefer to be prominent in their village, wherever that may be and they typically know a lot of people and are known my small masses. Before the major split in the whole clan, the people that are now in the Prince Clan were important in the once together Princep Clan. They are known for their superb archery skills and magnificent Wind Release Techniques. They are for the most part a powerful part of the Land of Lightning because during the formation of the Clans and Villages, they had superior Wind Release techniques which negated most of Lightning Release effects. Not many pf the ninja who challenged the Clan for their land ended up winning. They ended up controlling a big part of the land but eventually spread out to where they are today.

In terms of appearance, the Prince Clan mostly has either dark brown hair or darker blonde hair. The clan as a whole didn't quite have time to think of a specific clan wardrobe because they are too focused on the Clan Wars and the splitting of their own clan. Instead the tend to wear lighter clothes with the symbol of a bird. The Prince Clan also has dark brown eyes or lighter golden eyes, but very rarely in the middle [Like Ventus]. It is usually only in that middle color when a parent not from the Prince Clan has blue or green eyes. Since both the Jay Clan and the Prince Clan are skilled archers, most of the members carry Bow and Arrow sets or just know how to skillfully shoot a bow.

~History: The Princep Clan has always had a solid kind of foundation. When they picked a spot to live, they built around all the area and defended it with their lives. Very rarely did they ever have land taken from them. In the Cloud Village, the Prince Clan was different from the majority of other ninja from the village. Instead of Lightning Release, they used Wind Release, the opposite of Lightning. Instead of swords and other weapons that channel lightning, they use bow & arrow sets. They lifestyle they lived in under the village was difficult at first but eventually, the clan adapted and conquered the spot they live in. They found ways to channel Wind chakra through rods which would repel lightning. [For houses] Not only that, but they lived in the lower parts of mountains where the lightning wouldn't usually hit in the first place.

The whole clan started out as one big, sort of separate family. A lot of groups would live together and fight together. During the times of the Clan Wars, things became sort of tense. Many, many potential clans tried to merge with and then take over the Princep clan or just annihilate them completely. On one specific occasion, when the Princep's almost ended up losing a battle and a few members had died, a few heads from the clan got together and discussed what they were going to do.

They wanted to set up stricter rules and they wanted to be more unique, unlike other clans. Instead of using more Leaf Release, most agreed to focus on Wind Release, archery skills and their infamous secret technique which included Genjutsu. Living near a place with so much lightning, they decided Wind Release was much more important than Leaf Release. A few didn't agree with this and when it was let out at a clan meeting, only about half of the clan agreed with the suggestion. The other part just wanted to make sure they were safe and had a place to stay. In the middle of all the fighting between shinobi, more tensions were building between the one clan.

These simple conversations and scuffles turned into heated arguments and debates. People began to question their loyalties and lose trust in the prominent people in the clan. On one night, a small group of rouges brutally attacked the Princep clan, but they fought back. Some were using Leaf Techniques but would be stopped by people who didn't want the clan to use those kinds of attacks anymore. This lead to battle between the people of the same clan and before anyone could stop to think, Princep blood was shed. The rouge clan was frightened off by the fact that a clan-mate had just injured a comrade.

This lead to a whole new perspective, that people shouldn't be fighting in the same clan. It would only result in more bloodshed in a time when too much blood was already lost. At one meeting, the whole clan gathered and divided into two groups, one group for more strict learning and training of Princep values and the other for Independence and looser codes. Peacefully, the two new groups became clans, splitting supplies and trading material between themselves. Although many tears were shed and families were seperated, it was an even that need to happen for the Princep legacy to grow and evolve.

The Prince Clan was made up of the heads and leaders from the original clan. The elders had mostly choosen to stay and pass on ancient traditions and ways. The royal, leader-like name of Prince evolved straight from Princep which means "Leader" or "Dominant". This was considered the Main Branch out of the two. The Side Branch that broke off was named the Jay Clan because they had taken the special summoning contracts with the Legendary Jay Birds. They also adapted summoning contracts with other even more Legendary birds. Some of their techniques began to grow and mold themselves around birds and they even developed even more secret techniques than originally planned.
[[Allow me to point out something, Ventus was about an Genin here and he had already been learning the ways of both clans. He had developed mostly Wind Release Techniques, but had already began to learn some of the Leaf Release techniques. He just wasn't technically supposed to during this time. By the time he was a Chunin, the tensions in the clan had died down and some of the members who knew Leaf Release had been allowed to teach Genin and Chunin some techniques.]]

A few months after the split, both of the Clans prospered fairly. Neither clan had fought with or against each other and as everything began to settle, the Jay Clan migrated to a different area in the world. The Prince Clan ended up being apart of the Cloud Village in the Land of Lightning when it was created and was, like they always wanted, somewhat prominent. Not quite on a best-friends-with-the-Raikage kind of level but ran some of the shops and became a very strong clan, a force to compete with.

~Secret Techniques: The Prince Clan is rumored to have various special techniques. They are mostly all Genjutsu techniques combined with some Wind chakra. Rarely, students are taught to just control the jet stream or use their wind chakra to create currents. As far as Ventus is concerned, he doesn't take on the burden of having too many. They use up a lot of chakra and since some of his jutsu use a lot of chakra, he prefers to keep a balenced pallet so to speak.

Name: Secret Prince Clan Genjutsu; Royal Jay Flock
Type: Genjutsu/Wind Release Ninjutsu
Rank: S / A [It's secret, but ranked as an A]
Hand Seals: Tiger-Boar-Serpant-Dog-Monkey-Rat-Ox-Ram
Description: If the user is caught in the Genjutsu, they will begin to see the user fade and a flock of graceful Jay birds flying overhead and then approaching rapidly. They will then seem to quickly and closely circle the enemy and come in and slice repeatedly at the user. In reality, the user will be creating a vortex of wind and slowly cutting the opponent using that.
Extra: The justu can also be used with Fire or Water, etc. to make it more powerful or with weapons to use more precise and painful cuts.


*~Extra: The Jay Clan history is pretty irrelevant to Ventus because he doesn't really remember much of them or any people from the clan. Also, the Prince Clan isn't very big in size, but the few members that it does have are in the higher up positions, that's what I meant. It is rumored that somewhere in the mix Ventus has Senju blood as well, but that's not really important either.


Kekkei Genkai Template: Heavenly Fists;

~Name: Heavenly Fists

~Description: The Heavenly Fists Kekkei Genkai is a powerful one and is usually refered to as the "Princep Clan Secret Weapon." Because the Princep Clan aren't the biggest of people, they come off slightly weak. What people don't see is that they actually have a very powerful KG, Heavenly Fists. What this KG does, is that it basically increases the users strength almost tenfold. With advanced users [The Prince Branch] it can increase the speed, reach and accuracy of all blows, mostly punches. A big plus to it is that it doesn't wear out the user for a while and works until the user either release's it, or runs out out chakra. This KG requires accurate chakra control from separating the chakra for the actual attacks and the normal chakra you would use for other jutsu with the KG in effect, if you chose to use them.

~Forms: For the Prince Clan, it does a few things. First, it changes their eyes to a magnificent turquoise color. Second, it does all the things mentioned above. Third, it gives them a chakra 'glove' almost which is where all the extra reach and power comes from. There is also a justu that can be used only when the KG is in affect; Heavenly Ninjutsu; Guardian Fists

Heavenly Ninjutsu; Guardian Arms is much like the technique Asuma used when fighting Hidan in that Chapter. It basically gives the user more arms to fight with for a small period of time. It is good for a couple of combos before wearing off.

*~Extra: For an example of the strength, it is much like Tsunade's chakra enhanced strength except it has a lot more benefits and it slightly stronger, but not enough to matter really. Drawbacks are, that since they can tend to get heavy, the fists can add on extra weight and make dodging attacks a little bit harder. But it wouldn't be like one second jumping the next un-moving. xD

Another thing, Ventus could turn on his KG and fight with it for 30 consecutive minutes before it would turn off and he could potentially pass out from chakra exhaustion.

[[I'll probably edit this as we progress through the RP and everything, but for now just tell me the things I need to change! Also the grammer on this probably isn't the very best but I wasn't really paying too much attention to it. Another little heads up, I forgot a separate section for weapons but added them to the bottem of the Description when I was writing it.]]


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PostSubject: Re: Ventus Prince   Wed Apr 04, 2012 9:19 pm

Very well done history and whatnot. I can accept all of the aesthetics, but I can't accept the character entirely. I can't seem to find anything online in regards to your KG, Clan or the Leaf Release techniques. Searching on the wikia yields nothing whatsoever. So, before I can accept them, I need information on them. I'm unsure if these are all personal creations or what, but I need a link to the information or (more preferably) it needs to be posted here.
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PostSubject: Re: Ventus Prince   Thu Apr 05, 2012 11:50 am

I editied it now and put in the templates for the non-canon/made-up techniques except for the last three. They are all going to go in with my Clan template and KG template but I don't know where I should post those. Should they go in this thread or should I post seperate threads with that information in them somewhere else?
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PostSubject: Re: Ventus Prince   Thu Apr 05, 2012 7:59 pm

Just put them where you have Clan in the original thread.

I will say this though, I'm probably not gonna say yes to the Branch and Vine stuff, because that seems more like it would fall under Wood Release.
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PostSubject: Re: Ventus Prince   Thu Apr 05, 2012 11:51 pm

This should be everything! It's over 3,000 words I think. :3

Also, for the Branch jutsu, I figured as much but ironically, his mother is from the Senju, but not like at all relevant and was only born into it from as a rouge kind of. So she has the ability the blood and ability to use Wood Release but she really doesn't. So, I could take it out if you want but it makes a little sense that he could summon it but I see where one could be confused. :3
As far as the vine, it's basically just a whip made of leaves or plants with thorns on it. But I could also see where a person could be confused so I'll change it around if you would like.
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PostSubject: Re: Ventus Prince   Fri Apr 06, 2012 8:14 pm

Yea, I mean, you can't really have select abilities of a KG and not have the KG. It'd be like someone being an offshoot of an Uchiha and being able to have keen eyesight but not the other stuff.
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PostSubject: Re: Ventus Prince   Fri Apr 06, 2012 8:43 pm

I gotcha'. I took out the branch one and replaced it with another jutsu. I kept the vine one though because I didn't really consider it a branch but more of a plant-like whip. :datass:
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PostSubject: Re: Ventus Prince   Sun Apr 08, 2012 1:24 am

Okay... After reading through this, I've some things to touch on.


First, The Leaf Arts are really off. They're basically an extension of the Wood Release ability to create plant-life. Obviously, Wood Release is a KG that the character clearly does not have, and I'm not exactly comfortable allowing them without the KG even in their small number.

Also, of the three techniques you have listed, one is a Genjutsu that should have absolutely nothing to do with a physical plant to begin with, and another doesn't have anything to do with leaves at all. This strikes me as very odd. The Genjutsu shouldn't be in the same category as the other two since it's all mental, an illusion. The pine needles, while an interesting idea, is not a leaf, the very basis for the group of techniques. I'm afraid I'll have to deny them entirely.


As for your custom Wind technique, I like it. It's more or less a dual-cast Wind-based Rasengan that's very wild and unruly. I can see it being very fun to see in action. However, could you give us a little definition as to the magnitude of the tornadoes? Basically, How big are they? Assuming the middle of the generated tornadoes, Are they as wide as a tree? A man? A house? Also, how far can they go? A hundred yards? Two hundred? Miles? Feet? I doubt these answers will have an impact on my decision, but I would like to know just what the technique can do before I fully accept it.


Next, your KG. The description of the basic form strikes me as something akin to Nintaijutsu where the user augments their physical abilities greatly and, in this case, can strike a short distance away by using this 'glove' of chakra. By manifesting this 'glove' one can basically strike without necessarily using their fists, which is interesting, but how far away can one hit their target. Inches? Feet? Yards?

Also, the two techniques I don't think I can allow. Manifesting chakra in a pure and physical forms such as your suggesting is something exceedingly taxing and extremely rare. Yet, one of the techniques manifests arms with which to attack. I understand the technique only lasts a short time, but that's all you've given us. The same goes for the Hammer technique, though to a lesser extent.

I have a mind to deny both techniques, but I'd like to get more detailed information on them before I do so. Could you elaborate, please? I'm mostly looking for how long the character could maintain the normal form as well as the Hammer style, and exactly how much effort is required to create these extra arms and how many he can create.


Finally, the characters history. I'd like you to read the history I posted earlier about the Land of Lightning as well as the one for the First Raikage, and I'd like to point out that the village system was only recently implemented in our timeline of the Naruto universe. Please, take some time to read those items and compare them to your history. You may need or want to adjust a few things.

Also, as the one creating (and most likely playing) the first Raikage, I can say that exiling someone would not be something he would do very easily. Due to the history of both the man and the village, there would be no 'war' in such a short time after the villages inception. Again, the villages were only created around five years before current time. It's very hard to believe a village built by this man would grow to such an extent that it would be at war with anyone. If you'd like to discuss this matter specifically, feel free to contact me.


Should you have any questions or concerns, feel free to contact us via PM. I'd like to avoid bogging down the character files with lengthy discussions, and since this particular forum has the ability to maintain a conversation between multiple person in a PM, I believe it could be highly beneficial for discussions.
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PostSubject: Re: Ventus Prince   Mon Apr 09, 2012 10:23 pm

Alrighty then, I approve of thee, good sir. Just need another vote and you're all set to go!
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PostSubject: Re: Ventus Prince   Tue Apr 10, 2012 12:00 pm

YUSH! :moondo:

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PostSubject: Re: Ventus Prince   Wed Apr 11, 2012 11:19 pm

I must regretfully revoke my approval due to no longer being any form of administration. It was fun while it lasted. Best of luck.
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PostSubject: Re: Ventus Prince   Thu Apr 12, 2012 10:53 am

Merp. Crying or Very sad

Okay, sorry you had to leave.
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PostSubject: Re: Ventus Prince   Sun Apr 15, 2012 3:01 pm

Fine with me.
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PostSubject: Re: Ventus Prince   Sun Apr 15, 2012 6:40 pm

Well before Kichirou said I had to take ot Leaf Release because it was too much like a wood release/earth release and water release combo and it wouldn't be it's own type of ninjutsu so I just took that out and changed the last jutsu to a ninja art. I also made one trainable art Advanced Genjutsu so it would make sense when I use the clan techniques. Is that alright?

In simpler terms, I changed the Explosive Leaves to a Ninja Art, taking out the Leaf Release trainable art and made that blank Trainable Art spot into Advanced Genjutsu.
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PostSubject: Re: Ventus Prince   Sun Apr 15, 2012 10:22 pm

If you're gonna have Ninja Arts, those require a Trainable Art slot. That's what I thought your Leaf stuff was, just labeled wrong.
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PostSubject: Re: Ventus Prince   Mon Apr 16, 2012 4:12 pm

Well before Kichirou told me to delete all of my Leaf Release stuff and after I talk to him about it, that the only thing I wanted to keep. So I figured I would make the leaves that Ventus carries count as a weapon. But I made it a ninja art instead.

NTRBEVFCWD. ACTUALLY, I'll just take out the jutsu aspect and just make the leaves weapons that are like explosive tags. xD
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PostSubject: Re: Ventus Prince   Mon Apr 16, 2012 6:45 pm

Alright then.

And you can still have like, 6 more jutsu if you want.
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PostSubject: Re: Ventus Prince   Mon Apr 16, 2012 10:07 pm

I'm going to make another Genjutsu, at least one more wind release and another med. technique. But not for a couple days because I'm working on ways that they could fit into a story with his father. xD

But if you're okay with it so far I only need one more Admin to approve... Unless, since i'm red and all again I count as an Admin. AND THEREFORE I APPROVE MYSELF. Twisted Evil
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PostSubject: Re: Ventus Prince   Mon Apr 16, 2012 10:19 pm

Idk, you're not supposed to be an Admin so that's weird lol

But don't count my approval until you're done adding the stuff that you want haha
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PostSubject: Re: Ventus Prince   Mon Apr 16, 2012 10:26 pm

Thats happened to me like three times already. xD

And, tbh, they might just be Canon techniques but for right now i'm just going to put on a Wind Release and posssibly add a Genjutsu a lot later on like after we've began RP-ing. I'll go think up my Wind Release now. And add it. I'll PM you the template and throw it on here after I find/write it.
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